解惑开发难

深圳正安扣具

Hello Mr/Miss from 公司名字
Nice to meet you.Wish you have a good day !

Please allow me to introduce myself.This is 我的名字 from 公司名, China. We know your name and address from internet and know you deal in paper box.We are writing you and hope to establish business relations with you !

I visited your company website, let me have the idea of ​​cooperation with you.We are also a paper printing company in China, hope we can be friends. We have the experience more than 10 years.Our products enjoyed a high reputation in the market for their high quality and timely delivery.Our business scope covers fashion paper bags,envelopes,refinement gift boxes,all kinds of tag and label ect.Whether or not able to cooperate,pelease sent the mail back,thank you!

If any iteams we could offer, please let me know,We look forward to seeing you soon...


给客户发的卡发邮件，但是护肤的挺少，敬请大神分析解难，谢谢了@

夜、已清场

Hello Mr/Miss from 公司名字----------Hi，Dear+名字

Nice to meet you.Wish you have a good day !-------Have a good +星期

Please allow me to introduce myself（废话）.
This is 我的名字 from 公司名, China.
We know your name and address from internet and know you deal in paper box.）---简单介绍你是谁干什么的，This is 我的名字 from 公司名, China+你公司的优势 一两句话


We are writing you and hope to establish business relations with you !（废话

I visited your company website, ---看着不顺眼

let me have the idea of ​​cooperation with you.---这是怎么个情况

We are also a paper printing company in China, ----这句话意思是说你客户和你 都有在中国的公司？ 有歧义。

hope we can be friends. 凭什么有给你作朋友，业务都还没开始

We have the experience more than 10 years.

Our products enjoyed a high reputation in the market for their high quality and timely delivery.
Our business scope covers fashion paper bags,envelopes,refinement gift boxes,all kinds of tag and label ect.-----词语太累赘，，，搞得我都不想看，你们所说的优势我真是看不到，有数字或者认证的。

Whether or not able to cooperate,pelease sent the mail back,thank you!---这话的目的的你的产品不详细，卖家也不了解，只是一个机会去再次沟通，，这个写的没必要

If any iteams we could offer, please let me know,We look forward to seeing you soon.-------可以压缩..

夜、已清场

Hi dearMr/Miss ,

Have a good Monday. I am happy I could assist you.

This is 我的名字 from 公司名, China. having the experience more than 10 years 特别介绍重要认证+.你公司的主打，一两句，

From your web we find that almost all products we could make it for you, such as ...........,

timely delivery +具体数字去说明

其他你觉得客户会感兴趣的

If any preferences, please fell free to contact with me.

Thank you for your time,


上面只是我的个人意见。 隔行如隔山，你应该多花时间去观察你客户市场的信息等，多总结多更新多积累

B7in

豆豆强悍哦！话说开发信越简越好，你只要表明你是干嘛。你的产品比同行的有什么特色，能为他带来什么好处。这就可以了
一般都是
Dear + 名
一些祝福语。。
然后就是介绍一些你的热销产品，然后加上一些你们的优势。。
最后 一个if u have interste ，contact me pls。
tks。waiting for yr asap feedback
后面的你知道啦！  

深圳正安扣具

呵呵，太感谢了，回复的挺详细的

深圳正安扣具

B7in 发表于 2013-9-10 19:32
豆豆强悍哦！话说开发信越简越好，你只要表明你是干嘛。你的产品比同行的有什么特色，能为他带来什么好处。 ...

多谢大神相助！

B7in

深圳正安扣具 发表于 2013-9-11 14:46
多谢大神相助！

菜鸟一个！！！！

changxin-徐影

我来偷学，受教了，收入囊中！

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changxin-徐影 发表于 2013-9-16 09:06
我来偷学，受教了，收入囊中！

嘿嘿，我也是新手，前面几位才是大师级人物，都来这必能收益良多。