你写的开发信是不是有很多废话
原来写开发信的好坏与工作年限无关，与思路有关，你还是老思路吗？看维尼如何指导写开发信。有个小伙伴做车载产品的，发来开发信，让我帮她看看开发信问题在哪，内容如下：
Hi ,
Glad to know you are on the market for some Car HUD.This is Lisa,factory for Car
HUD projects car dashboard data(like speed,fuel consumption etc) onto the wind screen.It is a new technology now widely used in car industry.
It devides into 2 types:OBDII and GPS.Former one connected by OBDII cable line and used for cars with OBDII socket(Euro:after 2003,Asian:after 2007,Japan:not available),latter one connected by cigaeatte lighter charger,universal for any cars.
Our HUD exported to many countries,unit price ranges from US$39-US$50 EXW Shenzhen.
All HUD has CE,ROHS,FCC and a 1 year warranty.OEM&ODM both welcome.
Could I sahre you more details if you are interested in?
Looking forward to your reply,thanks.
Best Regards,
Lisa
我的指导：第一，冗长；第二，没有突出点；第三，废话太多
我的改善建议：简短，突出重点，介绍产品卖点，具体一款或者几款，通常是新品。公司介绍一句话概括。最后改成，Can I share more with you ? 交流经验，供求分享，外贸群533645120，
或者直接扫描我头像就可以进群哦
群主是做谷歌必应推广的，有需要可以找他19
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